Towitness①immoralbehaviorinpublic,oneneedonlyvisittheBeijingsubway.IstillrememberthefirsttimeItooktheBeijingsubway.Itwasanearlymorning.Iwasinahurrytogotoschool.WhenIwastryingtogetaticket,Ifoundalotofpeoplewaitinginfrontofme,butnobodywasintheline.
①Immoralbehaviorsinpublic②initiateaseriesofproblems.Oneofthemostseriousonesisthatitmayexertanegativeimpactonour③senseofsocialresponsibility.Wewillkeepignoringotherpeople'srightsandfeelings,andinturn,wetoowillbedisrespectedsomeday.
Thereformof①thisphenomenoniscertainlynoteasy.Withaneyeonpractical②implementationand③costeffectiveness,Iproposethatsocietymakeitclearineverywaythatpeoplewhofailtorespectthe④commongoodwillbeseriouslypunished.Stricterpoliciesforthisshouldbemadetocorrectthisphenomenonassoonaspossible.
Weallexpect“AWorldwithoutThieves".Everyone①sharesthehugeresponsibilityof②demonstratinghisorherjusticeatthepropertime.Personalresponsibilityisvitaltobuildaharmonioussocialistsociety.
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◇第一段思路点评：
◇语言点提示：
①immoralbehaviorinpublic：直接点题
◇第二段思路点评：
不文明行为的影响
①immoralbehaviorinpublic：重复名词词组，与第一段衔接
②initiate：意思是“产生，发动”
③senseofsocialresponsibility：意思是“社会责任感”
◇第三段思路点评：
如何改善这些现象
①thisphenomenon：指代前文“immoralbehaviorinpublic”，与上文衔接，且避免重复
②implementation：意为“执行，实施”
③costeffectiveness：意为“成本效率”
④commongood：意为“公益”
◇第四段思路点评：
好学英文网总结
①shareahugeresponsibility:意为“承担重大责任”
②demonstrate：意为“展现”
JoozoneEditor'sNote：
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