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2023.12.31甘肃
续写是最让同学们摸不着头脑的写作部分了。从哪里入手，写什么，怎么写等一系列问题亟待学生去解决。对于续写这个部分我会分开几期内容深入教学，带领同学们冲出迷雾。跟着我一起来学习和积累，保证你的写作思路和能力会有很大提升！
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提供一段350词以内的语言材料（故事类/记叙文/夹叙夹议类），要求考生根据材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示的关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
总分25分，按照5个档次给分
阅卷时将主要考虑以下内容：
1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度—故事逻辑；
2.内容的丰富性（动作描写/心理描写/情感描写/
环境描写）和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；
3.应用语法结构（非谓语/定从/倒装/虚拟）和高级词汇的丰富性和准确性；
4.上下文的连贯性---逻辑连接词
（however/but/finally/fortunately。。）
三、常见低分问题：
1）写不完
2）字迹潦草，龙飞凤舞
3）对话太多
4）时态乱用，do和did各种乱
5）句子表达错误太多（无谓语动词/一个简单句出现多个谓语动词/缺少主语/缺少主句…）
6）写的第一个句子与段首句不衔接
7）细节描写欠缺
8）所有句式过于简单，无亮点
以下是一篇高考真题，阅读后一起来分析吧～
四、真题演练
Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.
WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.
HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.'Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,'hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.
Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.'Don’tbelateforsupper,'UnclePaulcried,'andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!''OK!'mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.
注意：
(1)所续写短文的词数应为l50左右;
(2)至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
(3)续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;
(4)续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.___________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.___________________________________________________________________________________
做题步骤：
主要人物：I;dad;unclepaul
地点：farm
情节：骑马的经历/奇遇
人物：dad；unclepaul
地点：farmhouse
动作：getlost
抽象事物：latesight
具体事物：riversheeptrack
3)分析所给段落开头句
4）写作（do/feel/see/view。。。）
开头句很重要，写好可以让阅卷老师眼前一亮。那么如何写好开头句呢？你至少需要掌握以下三点：
Para1:ThehorsewassostartledthatittookoffrunningfasterthanIimagineditcould.
adv---突出场景冲击力
Para1:
Instinctively，Iyelledoutloud,pullingbackthereinshardinordertostopthehorsefromhurtingthelittlerabbit/creature.
Immediately,Ibecame/grewfondofthefurryrabbitandcalledoutexcitedly.
Para2:
Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledthewholearea
adj---勾画状态或情感
AfraidthatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.（情感）
Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.（状态）
Desperateandhopeless,Ifeltexhausted,tearsstreamingdownmyface（心理/情感）
WeakasIwas,Istruggledtomovemyfeet,continuingsearchingforhelp/assistance.（状态形式倒装句型）
Badlystartledbythesuddenincident,thehorsespedoffthetrackintoanotherdirection.
Wanderingaround,wewerestilltrapped/stuckinthedilemma.
以下是范文，供参考学习：
ThehorsewassostartledthatittookoffrunningfasterthanIimagineditcould.IwasholdingonashardasIcouldandmydadrodelikewindbehindme,callingouttotellmehowtosmoothetheterrifiedhorse.Ididso.Fortunately,thehorsecalmeddown,butweseemedtogetlost,unabletogobacktothetrack.
part2:
Wanderingaround,wewerestilltrapped/stuckinthedilemma.(Thethoughtthatwemighthavegotlostinsuchdarknesssentshiversdownmyspine.)Tearsoffearfilledmyeyes.Fortunately,mydadwasnotaspanickedasIwas.Notonlydidhetakethehorsereintoleadtheroad,buthealsocomfortedmewithencouragingwords.Afterwhatmusthavebeenmorethanonehour,Isuddenlyheardthesoundofsheep/river.Webothrodethehorsestowardthesound.Finally,wefoundourwaybacktothefarmhouse,seeingunclepaulwavingtous.