《新概念英语》三册的学习中很重要的一点就是写作能力的培养，而中国同学在英文语句的写作方面往往会有一些不那么“地道”的表达。我根据自己的教学经验和平时积累的同学们作文实例，对作文中经常出现的一些句子方面的问题作一个小小的总结。
1.sentencefragments(incompletesentences)
lHowtouseit
lTheessayispoorlyorganized,thereisnocentralidea.
lTherewerepeoplewhowouldbegladtoseehimleavetheplace,heknewit.
Exceptionsmadebyexperiencedwriters:
lHewas,Ithink,veryhandsome.Igatheredthisfromphotographsandfrommyownmemoriesofhim.Handsomeandproud,likeapeacock.(senseandstructurematchedwell)
lIshookhishandsandhisshoulders,asIcriedouthisnameagainandagain,but,noresponse——hedied.(asuspensecreatedbyshort,incompletesentence)
2.chopsentences(short,simplesentences)
Inadvancedwriting,studentsareencouragedtowritelongandcomplexsentences,conveyingsufficientinformationandideas,makingsensegroupslogicallyandnaturallyconnectedsoastoachieveatightlywovenpieceofwriting.Shortandsimplesentencesmaybeusedforachangeorforsentencevariety,aswellasforsomespecialeffect.
lTherewasapinetreeonthetopofthemountain.Itstoodlikeagiant.Ittoweredoverthetreesaroundit.(Onthetopofthemountainstoodagiantpinetree,toweringoverthetreesaround.)
lMr.Smithlikestodrinkallkindsofwines.MostofthemareproducedinFrance.(Mr.SmithprefersFrenchwines.)
3.colloquialwordsandexpressionsinwriting
Writingitselfisgenerallyformal,oratleastlessinformal.Therefore,ifitisnotwrittenforsomespecialinformalsituation,formalandstandardwrittenlanguageispreferred.ColloquialEnglishis,inmostcases,notproperinessaywriting.
lI’vegotaterribleheadache.(Iamafflictedwithabadheadache.)
lWedon’tagreewiththatguy.(Wecannotseeeyetoeyewiththatman.)
lHedidn’tsayaword.(Hekeptsilent.)
4.generalandsubjectivewordsinwriting
Generalandsubjectivewordsmaysuggeststrongsenseofpersonalandindividualopinion,whichmaylackevidenceanddetails.Morespecificandconcreteillustrationandobjectiveanalysiswillspeaklouderandmakereadersmoreconvinced.
Avoidusing:
lIthink…
lInmyopinion…
lIfirmlybelieve…(Alltheabovemayconvinceusthat…)
lIwonder…(Theproblemmaylie…)
lYoumayagreewithmethat…(Whatisacceptablebymostofusmaybe…)
lMyconclusionis…(Fromtheaboveanalysis,wemaysafelycometotheconclusionthat…)
5.monotony(lackofsentencevariety)andredundancy(wordylanguage)
Formonotonyandredundancy(longandshort,simpleandcomplex,differentsentencestructures,etc.///toomuchrepetitionofsomewords,str),yourwritingmaysoundbothboringandtiring.Ifyoucanchangethepatternoccasionally,readersmaygetrefreshedandregaintheirenthusiasmandinterestinit.
lLiQing,whowasafirst-yearstudentofthecollege,wouldgotoaparknearherschooleverydayinthemorning.Shewouldbringasmallrecorderwithher.IntheparkshewouldfindaquietcornerandlistentoatapeofEnglishstories.(Everymorning,LiQing,afirst-yearstudentofthecollege,wouldgotoanearbyparkwithasmallrecorder,whereshewouldfindaquietcornerandlistentoatapeofEnglishstories.)
lThemachinewasjointlydesignedbytheoldengineerincollaborationwithsomeofhisyoungercolleagues.
Themachinewasdesignedbytheoldengineerincollaborationwithsomeofhiscolleagues.
6.logicalproblems
loose:Theessayispoorlyorganizedandthereisnocentralidea.
(Withoutcentralidea,theessay…)
(Theessayispoorlyorganized,asithasnocentralidea.)
unity:BorninasmalltowninSouthChinaintheearly50s,hegrewuptobeafamousmusician.
(HewasborninasmalltowninSouthChinaintheearly50s.Inhischildhoodhelikedtosingsongs.Laterhegotachancetolearnmusic,andaftermanyyears’efforts,hebecameafamousmusician.)
coherence:Animportantthingforthestudenttorememberisthatwhenwritingapaper,you(he)shouldnotplagiarize.