1、小学英语五年级上册各单元作文范例及点评MyEnglishTeacherMissTangismyEnglishteacher.She’sverypretty.Sheistallandthin.Shehastwobigeyesandasmallmouth.Herhairislong.Shelikescatsverymuch.Andshelikessinginganddancing,too.HerEnglishisverygood.WeoftenplaygamesinEnglishcla
2、sses.Sheisverykindtous.Weallloveher.【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是“我的英语老师”，是一篇介绍人物的作文。小作者开门见山，直接点题，首先介绍了英语老师的姓名，然后逐一介绍了她的外貌特征、喜好、英语水平、上课特点以及师生情感等。小朋友们在写作文时，要注意使用自己最熟悉的词[组]，以免写出一些错句子。写作时要注意意思连贯、语句通顺、标点正确、书写清晰、规范等。MyDaysoftheweekI’mastudentandIaminGrade5.Igetupatsixo’clockeve
3、ryday.Ihavebreakfastathalfpastsix,andgotoschoolatseveno’clock.IhaveclassesfromMondaytoSaturday.IhaveanEnglishclassonFridayandIhaveaPEclassonTuesday.Idon’thavetogotoschoolonweekend,andIlikegoingswimmingonthatday.【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是“我的一周”，小作者没有说一些空
4、话，而是从自己的亲身经历写起，叙述了自己一周七天的所作所为，并特别强调了星期天的喜好，写得自然、流畅。小朋友们写作文时要注意人称及谓语动词的变化，要依据提示，结合自己的实际，写自己身边熟悉的事情。IcanhelpdohouseworkIamagirl.MynameisLiLing.I’minClassThree,GradeFive.I’mveryhelpfulathome.Icanwatertheflowers,emptythetrashandsweepthefloor.Aftermeals,I
5、canhelpmymotherdothedishes.OnSunday,Icanwashtheclothes.WhataboutyouAreyouhelpful,too【要领点评】本篇作文的题目是“我可以帮助做家务”，作者主要叙述自己在家帮助做的事情，介绍自己的名字，所在年级及在家能做的家务，很详细，到位。小朋友们在写作时，应尽量写一些亲自经历的事情，这样会避免在作文时显得太空，因为只有自己经常做的事情印象才会特别深刻。写作时还要注意大小写和时态。MyVillageMyvillageisverybeautifu
6、l.Therearemanyhousesinthevillage.Nearthevillage,thereisaforest.Asmallriverisinfrontofthevillage.Thewaterinitisveryclean.Wecanseesomefishintheriver.Neartheriver,youcanseeamountain.Someflowersandgrassareonthemountain.Ilikemyvillage.Welcometo
7、myvillage!【要领点评】本文以“我的村庄”为题描述了自己家乡的风景。介绍了村庄的房屋、森林、河流及大山，使人看了这篇作文后确实感觉到“我的村庄”的美丽。小朋友们在写作时，可仔细想一下自己的村庄或所在城市的特点，尽量使用本单元学过的单词或短语进行叙述。小学英语五年级下册各单元作文范例及点评MyweekendTherearetwodaysontheweekend,SaturdayandSunday.OnSaturday,Ioftengotomydancingclassinthemorninganddomy
8、homeworkintheafternoon,andIoftenhelpmymotherdosomecleaning.OnSunday,Ialwaysvisitmygrandparentsinthemorninganddosomereadingintheafternoon.Afterdinner,IoftenwatchTVwithmyparents.Atthattime,wecantalkwitheachotherandsaysomethinghappily.Weoftenhavea
11、stingthingsineachseason.Inspring,theweatheriscoolandwindy,Icanflykiteswhenit’swindy.AndIcangohikingwithmyfamilywhenit’ssunnyandcool.Ilikehiking.SummerishotinthenorthofChina,butit’snotlongtime.Ioftengoswimming.Itcanmakemehealthyandstrong.Ic
12、analsowearmybeautifuldresses.Fallisaseasonwithharvest.AndIcaneatdeliciousfruitsinthisseason.Icanwatchtheleavesfall.Wintercomes,it’softensnowyinwinterinmyhometown.Whenitsnows,everythingiswhite.Wecanplaywithsnowandmakeasnowman,skateandski.Andwint
13、erismyfavouriteseason,becauseoftheSpringFestival.Iloveseasons.Ilovethenature.【要领点评】写法：这篇短文是描述“我的四季”，在写法上，是根据春、夏、秋、冬四季的更替来写的，先讲明每个季节的特征，之后再写在这个季节中的主要活动或比较有代表性的活动。同时讲一些自己的真实感受，最后阐述自己最喜欢的季节。在实际的写作的时候我们还可以先写出自己喜爱的季节及主要的活动内容，之后再去讲其他几个季节，还可以多讲解一下地域的季节特征和大自然中的其他景色，如：秋天的田地里一片金黄，农民在收割等等，这
14、样写出来的四季更贴近实际。时态：这篇习作讲的是“我的四季”，是比较惯常的一些行为，所以我们最好采用一般现在时和情态动词结合活动的写法。即：在什么季节，天气如何，我们可以做什么。注意：在写作内容上，不可以像以往的内容那么简单，因为有四个季节，所以要写明季节，季节天气，季节性活动，活动的人，活动的感受等，要求句子顺序要正确，在写作中还要注意关联词的使用，如用了“因为”，就不能用“所以”，二者不可以同时出现。词量要控制在80个词以内。MyfamilyTherearefivepeopleinmyfamily.Theyaremygrandma,grandpa
15、,dad,momandI.Look!GrandmaiswatchingTV.Grandpaisreadingabook.Dadiswritingane-mail.Momiscookingdinner.Iamdoingmyhomework.Ilovemyfamily!【要领点评】写法：这篇习作介绍了自己家的家庭成员，以及此刻他们正在干什么，表达了自己对家人的感情。时态：由于本单元主要讲的是现在进行时态，所以建议采用现在进行时态。句型：主语+be+动词的现在分词。注意：本单元的重点是现在进行时态，注意在写句子时
16、要保持时态的完整性，即系动词和动词的ing缺一不可。AFieldTripItisaniceday.Ourclasswillhaveafieldtriptoday.Theclassmatesareveryexcited.Look!Hereweare.There’realotofactivitiestodo.Amyiswatchinginsects.Peteriscollectingleaves.Theywanttowriteareport.Mandyiscatchingbutterf
17、liesinthewoods.TimandBobareplayingchess.Someoftheclassmatesarehavingapicnic.Thereisalotofdeliciousfoodtoeat.Oh,who’sthatoverthereIt’sMissWhite.WhatisshedoingSheistakingphotos.Wehadaverygoodtime.I’llneverforgetthisfieldtrip.【要领点评】写法：这篇习作是按
19、rkshardatit.ShereadsEnglisheverymorning.ShelikesspeakingEnglish.Sheoftenlistenstotheradio.ShewatchesTVonlyonSaturdayevening.DoesshelikedancingNo,shedoesn’t.Butshelikesdrawingandsinging.Herparentsloveher.Andalltheteachersandherfriendslikeher,too.
21、’t.”和“shesaysherhobbiesmakeherhappy.”就是十分不错的句子，使读者眼前为之一亮。Don’tbeagainstthetrafficrulesIgotoschoolfromMondaytoFriday.Igotoschoolbybikeat7:30inthemorning.Imustcrosstwobusyroads.Ifthetrafficlightisredoryellow,IknowIcan’tcrosstheroad,soIwait
23、大小写、句子的标点符号等。ILoveMyFamilyHereisaphotolfmyfamily.Thesearefourpeopleinmyfamily.Theyaremyfather,mymother,mybrotherandI.Myfatherisadoctor.Heworksinahospitalfaraway.Hegoestoworkbysubway.Mymotherisateacher.Sheworksinaschoolnearmyhome.She
24、goestoworkbybike.Afterwork,theylikereadingbooks.WhoisthetallboyHeismybrother.Heisfiveyearsolderthanme.Heisasinger.He’snowinBeijing.Hegoestherebyplane.Ilovemyfamily.【要领点评】一个平凡的题材，一篇生动的作文。这样的命题，我们可能面对几次，甚至几十次了。但这位小朋友的笔端很是灵巧，了了数言，让一个幸福的家庭跃然纸上，很值得我们去思考，我
25、们能做到吗？小朋友的这篇作文除了语言优美之外，在结构上也有闪光之处。先总说，将自己的家人逐个介绍一遍，后分说，把家人的工作、上班方式，爱好一一细说。最后以一句话进行概括，起到点题的作用。我们在写类似的作文的时候是不是也可以借鉴呢？HowtogettothesciencemuseumWearegoingtothesciencemuseumtomorrow.ThereisanoldthingshowintheMuseum.DoyouknowhowwecangettothesciencemuseumT
26、hesciencemuseumisnexttothePeople’sPark.It’sisn’tfarfromourschool.Sowecangothereonfoot.Walkstraighttothewestfromourschool,nextturnleftatthepostofficeandwalkforabout5minutes,thenturnrightattrafficlights.YoucanfindthePeople’sParkontheright.Walk
27、straight,andyou’llseethesciencemuseum.【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是“怎样去科学博物馆”。怎样才算是一篇好作文呢？通过你的叙述，能让别人很容易找到博物馆，这应是最基本的要求。小作者在文中告诉我们什么呢？首先他写了去博物馆的位置，最后浓墨重彩，指明从学校去博物馆的具体路线，这条路线够清晰吧！小朋友们在写这类作文的时候，总有些无从下手的感觉，不知从何说起。其实介绍路线，无非就是告诉他人某段路的起点和终点，还有就是如何从起点走到终点。要给他人说清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然后再通过自己的叙述，将路线清清楚楚得呈现出来。一定要注意行文中一些关
28、键的地方，如在哪儿转弯，向哪儿转，经过哪些重要的交通标志或显眼的标志建筑等。这样，你就能说清，别人也能弄明白。Let’shaveanicedayIt’sSundaytomorrow.I’mgoingtothebookstorewithmyfriendstomorrowmorning.Wearegoingtolookforsomegoodbooks.Wealllikereadingbooks.Wearegoingtoeatourlunchattherestaurant.Ilikechick
29、en,beefandvegetables.Afterlunch,wearegoingtotheSummerPalacebybus.WearegoingtoplayneartheKunmingLake.Maybewearegoingtorowaboatonthelake.Wow,thatwillberelaxing.Wearecomingbackat5pm.【要领点评】怎样才称得上是“美好的一天”？有两点不能忘记，一是安排得充实，二是安排得有意义。这两点小作者无疑都想到了，上午去书店看书买书，中午
31、.HisnameisJack.Jackis12yearsoldnow.I’m11.He’solderthanme.He’s150cmtall.I’m148cm.He’stallerandstronger.He’s43kgandI’m41kg.He’sheavier.Ourfavouritecoloursarewhiteandblue.Welikesummerbest.Webothlikesports,too.OnSaturdays,weplaypingpong.OnSunda
32、ys,weplaybasketball.He’sgoodatbasketball.ButIdobetteratfootball.Welaughandplaytogether.Howhappyweare!【要领点评】写法：这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友和我”。既然写作范围是两个人物，就要笔墨均匀，两者缺一不可。不能只描写朋友，也不能只叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。解决这个难点的关键是：找出两个人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、外貌、喜好等方面列举出每个人的具体实际情况，再进行比较，通过比较突出每个人物的特点。这样就把人物活灵活
38、sgoingtoreadamagazinethisSaturdaymorning.HeisgoingtogotothezoothisSaturdayafternoon.HeisgoingtobuyabookthisSundaymorning.HeisgoingtolearnKungfuthisSundayafternoon.HeisgoingtowatchTVthisSundayevening.2,我的好朋友MygoodfriendIhaveagoodfriend.He
39、rnameisAnn.HerChinesenameisWangXiaolan.SheisfromEngland.SheisinBeijingnow.SheisinYuyingPrimarySchool.SheisinClassFour,GradeSix.Sheistwelve.Shehasblueeyesandyellowhair.Herfatherisadoctorandhermotherisanurse.Herbrotherisfiveyearsold.Shelikes
40、dancing,singingandwatchingTV.Sheisfriendlyandshelikestohelpothers.Whatagoodgirl!3、根据提示，从表格中获取信息写一篇不少于60个单词的小作文，要求提示的内容要全部体现在作文中。MyFriendsIhavetwogoodfriends.They’reZhangPingandJim.ZhangPingis12.Jimisthreeyearsolderthanher.He’s15.JimisheavierthanZ
41、hangPing.He’s60kilograms.Jimistallerthanher.He’s162cm.ZhangPingisaChinesegirl.ShelivesinXinhui.JimisaCanadianboy.HelivesinGuangzhounow.ZhangPinglikesred.Herfavoritesportisbadminton.Jimlikesblue.Hisfavoritesportisswimming.Ilikethemverymuch.4、描写
42、你的周末生活，注意用一般现在时。MyWeekendIhavehappyweekend.OnSaturdaymorningIalwayshaveEnglishCLASsesatschool.IstudyhardintheCLASsroom.IntheafternoonIoftenplaycomputergames.OnSundaymorningIoftendrawpictures.SometimesIvisitmygrandmotherandgrandfather.SometimesIlist
43、entomusic.OnSundayafternoonIoftendohouseworkorgoshopping.SoIloveweekends.5写一个你最喜爱的人，请对他/她进行一定的外貌描写。MyFavoritePeopleWhoisyourfavoritepeopleMyfavoritepeopleismymother.Sheisbeautiful.Sheis38yearsold.Sheistallandthin.Shehasbigeyesandlonghair.She
44、likescooking.Shecooksgoodmealsforuseveryday.Andshealwaysdoesallthehousework.Shelooksaftermyfatherandme.Ilovemymotherverymuch.6、请描写一下你的房间，注意要使用“therebe”句型。MyBedroomIhaveaniceandsmallbedroom.Thereisabeautifulbedandtwosmallchair.Ialsohavea
45、bigandtallclosetbecauseIhavemanyclothes.Thereisabigdesknexttothewindow.Ialwaysdomyhomeworkatthedesk.Thereisafamilyphotoonthewall.Wetookthisphotothissummerholiday.Ilikemybedroom.、请写一个你最喜爱的季节，要写出你喜欢的原因。MyfavoriteseasonMyfavoriteseasonissummer.I
46、t’shotinsummer.Thereisasummervacationinsummer.Idon’tgotoschool.Ithinkmanychildrenlikethisseason,becausetheycaneatice-creamandgoswimming.Icangoswimming.SometimesIgotothebeachwithmyparents.SometimesIgototheswimmingpoolwithmyfriends.Iusuallyvisit
47、manyplacesinsummervacation.17、描写一种你最喜爱的动物，要对它进行外形描写。MyFavoriteAnimalMyfavoriteanimalisrabbit.ItsnameisSweet.Sweethaslongears.It’sverysmall.It’swhite.Ithasashorttail.Ithasredeyes.Itlikeseatingcarrots.Itlikesjumping.Itgoesjumpingthreetimesaday.Ilikeitverymuch.It’slovely.It’smybestfriend.Iliketherabbit.